Writing Critique Requested

Asari Kasubi is new at the ninja training hall. she quickly becoms populer and has to train hard to catch up to everyone

I made a bet with myself, that i won't be able to do a poem, of what i think while writing a poem. Needless to say, i won the bet ^^ *Edit: correcting few misspelled words and such...*

Don't know where this one came from

Story of a weather elemental turned Time God. Yaoi, Erotic.

Just a little something of how I feel when I look at the sea, and I put it as Fantasy cus the sea is where i come up with most of my fanatsies

...And the Darkness covered the land of men...

Raoul has a meeting in the morning with the Council and Mars, so he deals with it in the only rational way. He gets high on gas.

Wrote this one a while ago during my Xenogears/Citan kick. It goes on from there but I don't like that section so I'm omitting it, particularly as it contains high emotional stuff which I don't think I'm particularly good at writing. So.

Unless you consider vague references mature content. Anyone who can identify what I'm talking about in this generally wins kudos; if you can pinpoint the specific subject I'll do a sketch for you or discount a commission or the like. (Note that these corrospond to a mainly instrumental piece, and that I do not subscribe to the idea that all lyrics must rhyme and that a song must be symmetrical.)

Lyrics dropped from my head while listening to New Model Army and thinking of the time that had passed between the song's writing and what's happened then, and thinking of how much progress could have been made in the problems that were pointed out in it, and how much hasn't been made. And other little frustrations have crept in, and so on.

The story of a fallen Jedi as she quests for her greatest freind.

the beginnings of a poem about me drawing while listening to music

A random small poem, which took a downwards spinning way to darkest depths of my mind way too fast. Inspired by Chimaira's song Salvation

Been playing Legend of Zelda: Four Sword Adventure for a while now, and one of the best songs i've ever heard, is the song in Frozen Hyrule. This is a tribute to that song.

This is what happens, when your arm is almost rippen off by a several ton welding machine in steel wire factory + a depressed poetical mind of me...

When a dark chao, a hero chao, and a group of their friends accidently activate a mysterious necklace, their life changes but for the better or worst?

OKay this is a bit better then the 1st one so i'm happy with it I hope you all like it

I've changed the words a bit so it's not the same as my first song by the same name and I think it's better, oh and the bit about being immortal and mortal I cut that out

A summer pool party is thrown at Capsule Corp…and theres drinking. … adults start getting buzzed and soon a harmless game of truth or dare has began and two male saiyans end up twist tied in a dare that is sure to shape new feelings into the pair. Will the two take it lightly, or will there new feelings throw them into a whole new direction?

just a short expression of feelings.