Writing Critique Requested

feelings of desire run through my veins. the rush of blood to the head. the weakness in me.

Chapter 15: The pendulum room; where Vegeta gets to fight some inner demons and make some admissions; while Goku gets a lot of angst.

A poem that I relate to. I don't know how it is. Just read and maybe it'll make sense.

A song that could mean different things to different people. So please leave a few words.

poem

this is lyrics to a song i made up

I've been having a difficult time. Life is turning around and upsidedown. I just want to be a kid.

Please comment. I just wrote this. I had a feeling. It doesn't make much sense and isn't in a set form. But just take a glance.

this was, to be honest, written for me. as always i love comments and critiques, but please remember that this was not done from a strict sort of structure or want to impress. also as always, i don't know why the first line is a repeat. i did not submit it as such.

Please read and leave a word or two. I am a solo musician and would like to get the thoughts of writers like this community, to help me in my writing. So please critique. And in addition, please read my other lyrics/poems. Thank you very much!

An old poem I wrote. The start of my new account.

This is a song to remind you of society.

we all know the feeling....what happens at about 2 o'clock when the coffee's running low and the paper pile doesn't seem to be shrinking....please comment and CRITIQUE.

the truth about what happens in the inner circles of adolescence. just a little something i wrote during class....on my cell phone. ^^; haha, i needed practice with the buttons... please leave comments and critiques.

a quick, interesting idea. why are we so eager to slap labels on things? to categorize and sort everything from emotions to reactions? i vote we take the neutral path.

A darker, more realistic side of motherly instinct and cruelty. Manipulation, bitterness, and disgust. not quite finished.

What happens when the city's calm camouflage disintegrates. please read. i am new here, and in desperate need of some critique.

Inuyasha FanFiction Life with Naraku traumatizes Kohaku.He grows up to be demented&deranged. And when freedom doesn't turn out to be what he expected he lashes out against the world the one way he knows how. Sick&Twisted,Angst,Kohaku/Kagura,Kohaku/Sango(NC)

Inuyasha FanFiction. As a child Rin uncovered Sesshoumaru's terrible & secret fetish. When she grows up & falls in love it returns & destroys her life. Rated for its sick, twisted & disturbing adult themes. RinxOC M/F

just a poem