Writing Critique Requested

This is one of three poems I wrote that goes with my series, "The Half Moon Personified". It's in Caroline's POV.

A poem I wrote which expresses my inner faith and respect for my friends as I leave them behind to start a new chapter in my life.

Another old love poem

Something fairly recent

Vegeta's contemplations over a planet and a people unparalleled in the enigma of their demise.

followup to A Little Late. Father and son talk after a period of silence and finally confront each other on important issues. Vegeta, Trunks.

A daughter's reflections. Bra, Vegeta

PostCell. There might still be something to salvage among the wreckage. Vegeta, Bulma

This is one of my most recent poems, inspired by a young man that came into the ER where I work...Help me out with this, can you tell what he did? I'm not sure if the poetic situation is very clear, so all help is appreciated!

This is the story of a spartan named Carol. Her base is attacked and she must find the Spartan X to help save humanity, but will she? This was an assignment for my english class(like my The Lost Spartans story) and it uses vocab words which are underlined. If you don't know what they mean, then look them up XP thanks for over 100 hits

It's not terribly long, highlighting how Riddle came to his evil name. Possibly the first Voldemort fan-fic I've posted, but not the first I've written. Just the better of them.

How does one define hell? Wouldn't each and everyone have their own version of hell? I don't know if hell even exist, but this would be quite close for my hell.

I feel... Hate. This poem was written shortly after my best friend told me, that she has been raped. If it would be up to me, i'd kill him, then i would go down to the depths of Hell, drag his patchetic soul back to Earth, just for the sake that i could kill him again.

These are the scripts for season 1 of my Halo 2 machinima series. This is for all the Halo fans out there! Now has over 900 hits! Thanks guys I owe you all big time ^_^

So, I have this club called Quills; it's a creative writing club, where we get assignments and we have to write things that follow said assignment. The people there pretty much rock, but that's beside the point. Anyways, this is one of the assignments, which is due next Friday. I'd love to have your comments on it, along with your critiques; hack away at it as much as you would like. By the way: the assignment was to write at least one page's worth of a story, then write the same story in another preception.

Depressing stuff... ^_^;

What might have happened before Ocarina of Time. This is my rendition of the story. It's mucho fun to write!! Deals with death, so I'm rating it PG-13. Sorry, kids. ;)

quick song. that I wanted to write. already put to guitar. in the feel for this V-day. please leave feedback

A Sailor Moon tribute poem. It's sorta corny but it's cool.

Just one of my depressing poems...this is pretty much what most of my poems are like. This is one is supposed to be about Ai from the Princess Ai manga. I love her so much...she's just so pretty. ^_^;