Writing Critique Requested

A man who is searching for a message, he left for himself in his past life

Just like Against The World, the idea for Loving you came from another song and that song is the surviving together theme song. When I sing it to myself I sing it like I would sing the serviving together song. Hope every one likes it. Oh and Susie I hope you don't mind, it's just I feel I can make better songs if I have other songs to help me.

Daisuke learns the meaning of the old phrase, "You can't choose your family, but you can choose your friends."

Don't know what to say about this... So i won't say anything. I'll leave the definition to you to deside.

This tell the story on two people whos only destiny was to kill each so that they could leave there would of pain behind

Elves are at war.

What will you find in the dark? Meet Soverin Daemon. Mercenary by day, whore by night. But this demon has more to him than just that life. He has the ability to raise the most feared being in the whole world. Thing is, he doesn’t even know it. But the Seven Deadly Sins do, and they’ll do anything to revive their master and go back to their home in Hell.

Ed falls ill and Kimbley is there to care for him. The caring goes in to sharing, of bodily contact. Ed/Kimbley. Song fic-Nickelback's "Save Me."

This poem is a new beginning for me, as i tried a new way to write poems and so far it seems to be okay. This poem is dedicated to a friend of mine...

I was listening to some sad songs, like In This Serenity by Mayumi Gojo and Wilder Wein by Rammstein and i got compelled to try to beat their lyrics... Needless to say, it didn't work out... Poem is somewhat based to Ragnarök Online - game

This is the title poem of my humourous poetry book for children.

Just a quicky

Another one for the kids. A very different twist on the Jack and Jill fable.

This is one of a series of humourous poems I did for children.

This is one of a series of humourous poems I did for children.

One of a series of humourous poems I did for children.

This is another of the poems I compiled for children. This one was the first, which I wrote years ago.

This is one of a series of umourous children's poems I did. This has a kind of Harry Potter theme to it.

This is the story of the circle of life. It even applies to turds... not for the faint of stomach.

This is an ode to all those with outsized posteriors out there.