Writing Critique Requested

Like all young Stygian females, Aneksi, is send to the temples of Derketo to learn the art of sexual divinity and transmute into womanhood. In her new reality she is plunged into a world she never imagined; a labyrinth where the secrets of her bloodline’s mysterious fate connect to an inconceivable evil hidden in the depths of Hyboria.

The BloodElf Warlock Rhynessa Jholtan summons an imp to satisfy her hunger for magic... but something goes awry and instead four felguards appear in the summoning circle. Only thank to the help of her Tauren bodyguard Bhorr Thunderhoof Rhynessa survives...

A modernized version of the German tale, edited a little so it fits into my own little Universe

To him...it tasted like Chocolate picture from this link (http://darknature5000.deviantart.com/art/darkppCOM-purechocolateindeed-73560938)

This is a nonstory of a man who cannot extract a purpose from the events he narrates and thus inject meaning into his words. Here is a beginning without an end.

A oneshot created for a contest. Into the life of Sara, from the anime Inuyasha.

Why do Parents think they know best? Story is about young Izayoi, and how she grows up and then meets Toga. AU!

A brief exchange between two brothers. Word count: 665

A psychiatrists has to interview a patient, who thinks he is an angel.

A really short story I wrote... based on a writing prompt from my writing club. I think it's cute. :3

a protest poem. Rise up and fight!!

a short story I randomly wrote while watching The Last Unicorn... Felt like writing an original fairy tale. :3 Keep in mind, I wrote this in about 3-4 hours. -_-

a poem I wrote for class about my little brother. :3

a poem that was flying through my head during a really deep bout of depression...

A one shot I wrote a while back baced on YYH!

Inuyasha fan fiction. Sesshomaru's son Ashimaru and Inuyasha's son Otaru develop a strong friendship that is tested by family problems and enemie's attacks.

I devote this poem to my friends who are fond of fantasy and role-games.

Well this is my character with Dahdtoudi's character Katsumi...in a very...umm...well its about...sex...WOOHOO!

A poem that explains how Cloud felt after Aerith's death since she died in FFVII till the end of Advent Children (movie).

An Amazon and a necromancer meet in a camp full of soggy homeless Rogues. Set during Act I of Diablo II: Lord of Destruction.