Alright, review posted.  I hope it's helpful and what you were looking for.  Overall, I really want to stress to you that you'r writing is really good and it would be a shame if you decided to quit especially if you enjoy it.  I can't say whether you've improved or not, but it would be nice to see more from you.

Thanks, I think I know what you mean. I have had trouble showing more emotion and personality in my writing. Ill definitly work on this.