I really dident like how my TvA fic turned out so I decided to re-write it. Here for your vewining pleasure is the firt paragraph of the first chapter, please compare to thefirst chapter of the old one.

The elderly scientist escorted the young college graduate to the labrotory. They passed many rooms filled with odd noises and bumps, however the older man was used to it. The younger lady however was unnerved. The man smiled, "Don't worry, its nothing out of the normal." The girl was hardly solaced by the gentlemens seemingly kind words. They entered the last door in the hall, a very normal looking door, compared to the deadlocked fortessess that were the other doors. The man started fiddeling with a large machine. A month back, SH-001 was born, and now to engineer SH-002. They were to make a superior version of the last. He scratched his beard and turned around to talk to the new girl, but she wasent there. "Probably went for a snack." he thought aloud. He went to continure his work when he felt a sharp pain in his gut. A huge black, sickle like tail had peirced his stomache. He gurgled in pain, but could not scream. He looked up and saw it hanging from the celing. Its long, shiny head twisted to look at his and it hissed. It lifted the man towrds him. Then everything went black.