Something about his left hand...it doesn't seem right. It doesn't really look like he's holding her. Like, wouldn't his fingers curve with her body more?
Other than that, it's very nice. I can't wait to see it finished! Whee!
yeah i need a red pen crit on the hand. I didn't want it to look too much like his other hand because it causes the twinning effect but i'm not really sure what else to do with it.
That, I'm afraid I can't help you with. I got enough art smarts to see something's not quite right with it, but actually fixing it is a step above my current abilities. Sorry.
Other than that, it's very nice. I can't wait to see it finished! Whee!