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Comment 126144
Comment ID 126144
MissDirection
May 16, 2022, 3:14:10 AM UTC
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[Writing] a kid with mixed thoughts
I like the story, but I feel like the lack of proper capitalization, commas in incorrect places, and misuse of their/they're/there hold it back.
The usage of an unreliable narrator is nice.
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